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作业题目

Do you agree or disagree with thefollowing statement?
Universitystudents should take the history courses no matter what field they study in.Usespecific reasons and examples to support your answer.

作业精批

It benifits (benefits) universitystudents a lot to take history courses. For one thing, it provides a wide rangeof knowledge to them. By taking courses, a student will be aquatinted with manyhistorical events in the past, including some interesting stories, which willbroaden his/her horizon. For instance, students can learn how the Britaingovernment develop (developed) its democracy in 17th century. Inthe process, they will conceit about how the society affected people and howindividuals influenced the development of society. That is an abstract concept,and only by learning history events can we understand it, which will help us toget a deep understanding about the current world. Besides, after learning thehistory of ones own country or the world, he/she will have more topics to talkabout with others which will add colour to daily conversations.

综合评价:

整体来说,棒棒哒!但要注意一下问题哟!

1.每次写完作文花1-2分钟检查,避免些拼写或小语法错误哟!benefit, developed

2.整体框架不错,但个人觉得最后一句话要么放到前面些说,要么去掉。因为该段的逻辑结构后半部分已经为具体的example,所以不太建议最后再来个新的idea.

3.最后,如果想拿高分,根据评分标准,建议把一些general word给换一下 比如:a lot,greatly, overwhelmingly, considerably, prominently

参考范文

In the firstplace, having history courses in university can help students have abetter understanding of the evolution of human society(大学里面学习历史课能帮助学生更好的理解人类社会的进程). By takinghistory courses, students will be enlightened by the ancient Egyptians’ greatscientific, technological and political advancements that were demonstrated(证明,显示) in theirbuilding of the pyramids. It is by studying modern history thatstudents know how three scientific revolutions brought society to modern age ofinformation. (正是通过学习现在历史学生们才能了解三次科技革命是如何把人类社会引领到信息时代的) Human societyhas a history of evolution, and knowing something about our ancestors can helpus have a better understanding of human nature. We ought to broaden oureyesight (扩大我们的视野) by enriching ourknowledge of human history. People need at least an elementary understanding ofhuman history if they are to make meaningful contributions to our future.

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